Advanced Reading, Writing, and Grammar

4) the writer said: What sence does it make for us to speak of “giving” a grade to a student? or for his “earning” and ”deserving” that grade?
I really think his idea is not convincing at all, because if a student had a grade without earning it (as the writer assumes), then how should we expect people to work hard? Or how can we evaluate the students fairly?I also think it’s not logical to comare students’ mark to the hight of the desk or the weight of a chair, because these are physical facts that cannot be changed. On the other hand, a student with limited abilities can work hard and earn a good score.

 P.S. From Asel. Dear all.  am sorry, I’ve lost my textbook, so I can not fulfil the task and post all answers rather than my own opinion.  May be someone else can provide our answers instead of me.

Erik, as soon as I’ll get my book back (hopefully) I will post my response. Thank you.

The writer’s main purpose is to give an information how the students could improve their self-esteem. to do that, we need higher evaluating standards to help and to motivate the students. the main audiences could be teachers not only who concern with students’ education but also who complain students’ accomplishment. Also, the secondary audiences could be students who lose their confidence in studying. 

Sujang

 This is my new  first essay, and I need your assessment!

 Like many other TV stations, lots of writers are working in my company.In cooperating works with  them, I have experienced wonderful moments that the writers gave to me. Some writers presented incredible scripts that I can’t even imagine. Through these experiences I made my own thesis : A story is the most important facts in making programs. It means audiences are mostly influenced by  stories, not production skills or actors. So I have always  admired and envied their blessed abilities of writing. Because I was really poor at writing.

 When I was a primary student, there was a homework that I really disliked.  Especially, after a  long vacation, when I had to submit homeworks,  I was almost panic because of that homework, it was diary. Usually, last day of vacation, I was busy  making tens of fictions.  At that time I couldn’t understand the reason why my teachers compelled me to write boring stories of my life. I thought diary was a kind of purniment.  However, the writing works were growing larger and larger in school.  Those works like reports,  presentation scripts were my haedaches.  So I sweared I would not get a job which relate to writing. That is the one of the reasons that I applied and got a job in record company.  I guessed what I should do in record company is just listen.  No later than,  I realized I was  totally wrong.

 My task in that company was A&R (means artist and repertoire).  To explain shortly, my job was listening new albums which released in other countries (99.99% were made in America) and deciding whether we release it or not in Korea. Besides, my boss assigned me to do PR job. As you know, the main purpose of public relation is to inform  public what we have and stimulate them to buy our products. Therefore, the most important thing in PR is preparing press releases which would presented to media : tvs, newspapers, magazines….        And the a press release is consist of pictures and  WRITINGS!  Ironically I had to do what I really want to avoid.  That’s the life!  

 At first PR job was too tough for me.  Usually ten new cds were released in a month. It means I must write three or four reviews on new cds. ( because there were other colleagues in my office) Obviosly, i should quit that job regarding my writing problems, but the reason that I loved music so much made me work hard.  Sometimes I enjoyed my writings. Review on Micheal Bolton’s second solo album “ Time Love And Tenderness ” and a article about New Kids On The Block for music magazine are remainded in my head word to word. How can I enjoying writings? I think the secret was feedback of readers and buyers. Their reactions removed my fear about writing somehow.

 But please don’t misinterpret my intention, I’m not proclaiming now that I have became a good writer. I’m still afraid of writing.  Lifes in MEI reminds my school days. Even though I got over fear of writing a litttle bit, this time I must get over the fear of the english.              

 Yun                                  

Today is terrible day. The internet didn’t work untill 40min ago!!!! >_<

Anyway I will be glad if u guys give my score although it’s very late.

revison(Myself as a writer)-Joonmee

  Did you see that baby cried when mother bathed a baby? Maybe nobody did. And then, do you know how to give a baby a bath as it doesn’t cry? That is to put it in bathtub as a baby can see water. The why that baby doesn’t cry after seeing water is that there is no fear about it doesn’t know and a baby remember the condition when it was in inside of mother, like water, and I already knows how to swim by instinct. How about writing? Do you get fear from filling the white paper, or remember your instinct? Here is the story about a girl who becomes a brave swimming baby eventually.

 I had been a ordinary baby like scared water since I was young. For example if I can choose my assignment between writing and drawing poster, I always choose drawing poster because I have no confidence in writing. Someday teacher told us to describe our feeling. All students expressed it through writing except me. I did that through drawing. As you can see, drawing was more comfortable than writing to me. At that time I filled with stress that I had to make a perfect product when I took a white empty paper. Because of that, to start to write something on paper was like a punishment.

 However I am no longer the person who fills with fear about writing. A crying baby was changed to a brave one a few years later. When I just became a university student, I started to write diary on my homepage, and also write essay about special subject, not quite long from the moment that I used to write something because of diary. Through like that process, now writing is one of methods to get rid off my anxiety with drawing. When I have a problem, so am worrying something, I make a brief comment below my drawing and then post it on my homepage. In the end writing becomes to me not scare but friend. When I face a white blank, I am excited rather than move one step back.

At first time, I just tried to escape from writing because that is weird world that I didn’t undergo, and was strange to me.  After to write something became familiar, however, my though was changed. As I considered writing as a product that has perfect format and have to be stressful thing, I can get out of the dark hole that comes to me always when I start to write. I can be a brave baby because I knew the fear is nothing but emotion to appear because of thought which writing is unfamiliar to me through experience. I’m not a good writer but also professional writer, but I know writing is a pleasure before being skilled ability and it doesn’t need to be a good organized thing to be writing.  Although I can’t make well- organized work, I think I am a good – write-er who can enjoy the writing.

Here is my 1 virson.

(Myself as a writer)-Joonmee

  Did you see that baby cried when mother bathed a baby? Maybe nobody didn’t. And then, do you know how to give a baby a bath as it doesn’t cry ? That is to put it in bathtub as a baby can see water. the why that baby doesn’t cry after seeing water is that there is no fear about it doesn’t know and a baby remember the condition when it was in inside of mother, like water , and I already knows how to swim by instinct. How about writing ? Do you get fear from filling the white paper, or remember your instinct? Now, I’m going to introduce myself as a writer. Let’s go inside!  

 To write something is ordinary thing in my life. I write my thought by different kinds of way. Especially in my homepage I write diary almost everyday , sometimes I write essay about special subject, not quite long. That subject used to be chose by my own mind. What I like the most kind of way to write my thought ,among many kinds, is to express with my drawing. When I want to say it whatever I think, I add brief writing below my drawing. As adding that comments , this becomes a my own work that mention my own voice only. In addition, of course, I write for report many times as assignment and I’m used to write a letter.

 Then, what is writing? It is just do write something for me. I mean, writing has meaning as it is. I think Just to write what I want to say can be good work as if there was a wonderful work of art although the painting  was colored just black. Through writing , I feel freedom. I not only can say anything in front of white paper, I can make my own world in there. Occasionally Writing makes me precide my uncertain thought. If I can’t be aware of my mind although I spend many time to think about what I want or I have many idea in my head , I can make this clear through writing. As many people feel fear from filling in the blank, I also do in case that I have to make well – organized work , like  report.  However, through the practise , like this kind of thing to write thoughts which I have just that moment on paper as I do frequently, I think  It is acceptable to write report more confidently , comfortably for me, at least in the part to deliver my thought from my head to  white paper. 

  I’m not a good writer but also professional writer. Though, I think we don’t need to be afraid of writing and to have a burden about it. Like a baby , the fear is nothing but emotion to appear because of thought which writing is unfamiliar to us . We already know how to say as writer as well as how to speak our voice just like a baby who knows the way of swimming by instinct. It is no big deal whether Our writing is good work and also  I think it is the point that is considered after putting our real voice into the bottle whose name is paper if the writing is well – organized thing. Wake up your ability that is sleeping ! If you find your instinct to want to say your word , you can be a good- write-er who don’t be afraid a white paper. Writing is a pleasure before being skilled ability to me. Although I can’t make well- organized work , I think I am a good – write-er who can enjoy the writing.       

Myself as a writer

      From the past, since human created a letter, every single human who can write is born to be a writer. I heard this idea for many years ago since I was in primary school, and I was quite supporting it. This idea is focus only the ability to write, no matter it is good or not. Within my point of view, other than speaking, writing is the easiest, cheapest, and most convenient way in communication. With just a small book, or even a piece of paper and a pen, we can write everywhere we ever want. Thus, it has a lot of advantages. I think I am the one who enjoy writing for a whole my life.     

I do believe that I become a writer since I can write the first letter, actually may be before that. My parents still keep the first book that I wrote it. Of course, I couldn’t remember it, because I was too young. It can’t be read because it isn’t a letter. It was just a winding line. Surprisingly, my parents could understand what I was trying to say. It is because I was trying to draw a picture in addition to just write only a letter. This is the advantage that speaking does not have. We can draw or put any picture into our essay to make readers get better understanding.     

When I grew up, I started to write a diary. The main purpose is that I don’t want to forget many of my good memories because I’m such a forgetful person. So, I always have my own small note book together whenever I go outside. I love to go back and read my diary. I think it is worth to do because every time I read it, I can know how much I grow up. Moreover, sometimes when I feel stress and I want to release my bad feeling. A diary seems to be a good solution for me. It always listens to me because it can’t argue me.     

From the reasons above are worth enough for me to write it for 10 years. At present, I’m still writing my diary but I had changed it from a book to a blog. The additional advantage is that I can write my diary together with telling a story to my family and friends. They can also comment me via my blog. This benefits me very much because I love to hear and know other person’s thought. So, I can understand and know how to deal with this person. As a result, I always keep up-to-date the stories in my blog.     

Once I was in a university, there were ton of works that I had to write. This is the way of studying in my country. A teacher always gives a writing assignment to students.  However, it didn’t cause me too much trouble because writing already became one part of my life.        After graduated, I worked for two years in a private company in a position of customer services. During that time, most of my works are related to writing because I have to make an agreement with suppliers. From this point, I think writing becomes on of the importing in my life because it is not only for my hobby but also my education and work.      

    There’re many ways of communication in this world. Although the easiest way is speaking, I agree, but the importance of writing is not lower than speaking. Obviously, a letter is not vanishing like speaking. It will be with us forever if we keep it. This is because human cannot remember everything. So, the best way to remember is to write it. We all live in a world of education. I strongly do believe that writing skills is one of the important things in our life, especially in an education and working.

yok

I think the audience of this essay is non American Indian and male because she [writer] always mention about woman roles in society and a background of her nationality. The purpose is to inform the woman society. She wants to tell audiences about a point of view toward woman. The Presentation is quite because she tells about her story. The language is formal and contains high vocabularies. The evidences she used are example, anecdote, opinion, and experience.

yok

       The audience of the essay is a society. The writer addresses to people, who is not necessary to be experts in the American history. It can be recognized from the style of writing, her language is informal, but very rich and attractive.

        The purpose of the essay is explained in a presentation. Paula Gunn Allen describes the Indian American women’ world,  she wants to restore the representation of their real life style and their perception of the mission in the society as females. The author discusses the unfair and deeply wrong understanding by white americans of the role of Indian women. As the evidences she recalls her mothers stories, the tribal traditions, the fates of the women that she has met. Her examples vividly display a great gap in women’ definition between reality and “savage” image created by “respectable, loving, civilized white people”.

     The thesis of the the essay is describe the American Indian women’ role in a public life. She has a goal to reveal real woman, her spirit, her background, her hopes and disenchantments, her dreams and fears. She compares her resemblance viewing  from two different perspectives, tribal and social, that’s mostly means today’s United States. “Most Indian women I know are in the same bicultural bind… We resolve the dilemma in various ways… We act in these destructive ways because we suffer from the societal conflicts caused by having to identify with two hopelessly opposed cultural definitions of women.” 

       All evidences are persuasive for me, may be because she speaks very emotional and personal, or may be  because she discribes her own culture, no one else can talk about this issue so truly and convincing. I think that the most persuasive evidence is an example of comparing the woman’ status during her menstruation period. I think that the addressing to the idea about great connections between mother and child, between old and young can be concerned to any culture and group. This evidence seems me weaker that others.      

  I took a pleasure in reading such an interesting text. I love the writer’s jargon. The problem that she raises is still important today, because while there is a misunderstanding of single cultural interpretation, the whole world takes a risk to lose the truth and fair approach to any question.

Asel

The work of Holly Denvor Becoming Members of Society: Learning the Social Meaning is a research, refered to the scientific audience, that could be acquainted with this theme of study and also to people which have a high education level, so that they can understand the style of the text.  This field applies to the sociology, specifically to the gender explonation through the social spectrum. That pieces of information we can see from the presentation.

The main purpose of the writer is to demonstrate the motives and prerequisites that served as the base for genders’ perception.  She believes that the society’s expectation of the certain behaviors is the first condition to differentiate attitudes of male and female, begining from the first months of their lives till their roles in the public sceme. As the evidences, Holly Devor illustrates some North Americans’ ideologies, that come from traditional beliefs. Also she mentions some societies, such as Siberian, Madagascan, and Polynesian. Her arguments are based on the study of the different phenomena in the life, observing the male and female manners, speech, postures, physical development, and psyvological perception. Holly Denvor uses a lot of different resourses. The language of the work is very formal, full  of many specific terms, many of them I could easily understand because of their latin roots, that aslo very frequently used in Russian.

Asel

P.S. Sorry, guys and Eric. I had posted my response yesterday, but because of the problems that sometimes occure in this web-site, my response was saved in the different section and I have sent time to find it and repost again.

Myself as a Writer

As soon as I heard that our writing assignment will be ” Myself as a Writer ” I didn’t know what can I write. But because of the four days we were given before we should hand over the assignment, many and many ideas has come into my head , such as my special attitude while writing and some exciting experiences I had during my life.   As a writer I think that I have some attitude and ways which specialized me than other writers. Usually before I start any type of writing, I spend several minutes thinking about the ideas I’ll write about then I start writing. Sometimes I have in my mind a great idea about the conclusion but I dont have any ideas for the body, in this situation I start ( in my head ) from the end and ask myself what can be here just before this conclusion? and  so on. One of the magic things I found when I write is that as soon I start writing I feel that I can’t stop , but before that I stare infront of the white page without having single word to start with. Thats why I am always afraid from starting writing but as I start writing I enjoy it.  

 In my career as a small writer I faced different experiences which changed my point of view about writing. It statred since I was a child and it has grown with me when I grew up. My story with writing started when we had comprehintion lessons in the intermidiate school. My teachers always thought that I am a good writer and they have always given me high grades. It continued when I started using the internet. I used to go to website that is similar to the blog we have now this website has many people sharing there opinion online about different subjects. I wrote there about different subjects and it was very interesting for me until one day the website owners chosed me to be asubervisor in this site. I was very shocked I’m only 15 -year-old and they chosed me because of my writing to be a subervisor! The story between me and writing continued when I joined the secondary school. One day there was a compition between 45 gifted students I was with them about how can write the best story. At that time I wrote a romantic story and I’ve got the first award. The previous writing sucess were all in my native language, but I also had one sucess in English writing. In an English lesson in my school, our teacher asked from us to write a story in English. That time in only 40 minutes I wrote anoher romantic one page story but this time in English. In our next English lesson I was surprised that my teacher had photocopied my story and gave it to all of the school students and he said ” That is the best story I have ever read from a student”. These word that I couldn’t forget because it encoureged me and made me love writing. 

Lately at this summer I took  English course which taught me how to write essays. I really gained a lot of thing from this course eventhough it was not intensive one-month course. Now I’m here in the UMEI hoping that my writing skills will divelop  so that I can continue my success in wider sphere.

 Aziz

Holly Devor’s article has very academic contents. Analysis of field researchs, references…  And it’s purpose is to inform and explain about sociological topic : socialization of gender role. Her main assumtion is that people learn their gender identity ( role) and behavior through socialization. It means, they develope concepts of gender identity of themselves,  in reflecting society’s expectations. she also insists a femininity or  masculinity is the result of  shaping conducted by members of society. Young boys and girls are learn their gender roles from parents, family members, friends, teachers, and numorous faceless members of society.      Yun